Battle League Week 5: Spoke Vs RAS (RAS by TKO).

[ShadowBoxing89]

Rules

16 bars
3-0= KO
4-1= TKO
1st to 5 votes wins
No Free-posting until match is all voted up
Votes should be explained thoroughly
No Feeding

Post Editing

Can't edit your verse unless after the first vote if your the 2nd person that posted, 1st person can't edit after the 2nd person posted.

Vote Example

Multies:
Wordplay:
Punches:
Flow:
Personals:
Intro/Outro:

I don't want to catch people copying and pasting votes

Drop Due Wednesday at 11:59 PM Eastern Time

Also Remember Point system has changed

[$poke!]

$pOke!...........

[RAS.]

here...

[$poke!]

gotta run don't have the time to drop all 16 my bad peeps..
but i'll just drop these so I at least don't no show..

This nigga don’t “stand” a chance, wit the height of .”Abdul Jabbar” you couldn’t touch my Rim
Better off wit a av of “ru paul” (no cahones) Grow a “Rod Man”! Maybe you’ll “fuck and win” wit “them”
(fuck u imma win)

Your weight don’t match up, ya skills and post count need to “catchup”,
so I Mash, His 16’s “tomatoes”.
He Sunday “Dressing”,cause to win he gone need a ‘Blessing’ so tell this nigga to “Pray,Go!”
(Prego)

These are My Barracks! And R.as A.int a S.oldier, But I’m the “shooter with” Jamie Fox wit these bars.
He’ll have more than a scar And “Fall in Line” Like the “Marines” how I leave his “Head Ajar”(Jarhead)

Your “outlooks” dim, like the colors fading, wit these “Power Points” you’ll get served.
I’m “word-perfect” you can “Excel” and never see a “W” with those “Micro-soft words.”

me fail...wont happen, u not on my level, im lyrically ahead by miles
im foul...i'll rape this kid, dont care if he's only 15 like ima pedafile

again my bad peeps..but I rushed these..been kind of a busy week.

[RAS.]

They should have signed u out, your fucking lines are wasted
All ya shits basic ,Shit you drop more flat lines than ill patients
I'm too sick,you'll undoubtedly get your ass kick,your not a threat
I'm going to Flawless this bitch minus the skills and the decent concepts
Who set this up..giving me a wack bitch again
Cant be found on a map..cause his lines are imaginary like prime meridian
How do you win with that wack shit,But I'll off this bitch
That's a lot of secretary's you got,cant manage to stay off his dick
I'll rip u too pieces and walk away ass you beg
Spoke pay backs a bitch too bad it cost a arm and a leg


10 to match key style


Fuck it

[ShadowBoxing89]

Punches-Ras ( he had better setups then spoke, spoke was creative but failed at execution, he smoother his punches by being to wordy, keep it simple, don't cram concepts)
Flow-Spoke(Ras flow was off ont he last bars a bit)
Personals-none (av text and ish don't count imo)
Wordplay/nameplay-Ras(quality over quantity)

Overall-Ras with the more polished verse...spoke 's execution was bad, i guess cuz he rushed iunno. props to both though.

They should have signed u out, your fucking lines are wasted
All ya shits basic ,Shit you drop more flat lines than ill patients

okay ish, kinda played though

[Jae Fingerz]

Ya'll both need a lil work & I say that constructivly

Flow/Multies: Ras (but work on your multiples)
Wordplay: Spoke (although it seem you tried way too hard but you get an A for effort)
Personals: Neither impressed
Intro/Outro: fart
Punches: Ras (Spoke was rough around the edge, smooth it out)

I can't even pull any faves on this one

Vote: Ras

Constructive Critizism

Spoke- cirrcumsize the bars they feel more like a run-on sentence then corresponding words ya dig? rhyme schemes are key

Ras- work on your concepts & creativity, the flows there, you can set up a ryme but nothings hard hitting in there

[hot16]

Multies: RAS (only one who had em thorough)
Wordplay: Spoke (lost of analogies and metaphors)
Punches: Spoke
Flow: NEITHER (both were eitha choppy or odee long)
Personals: Neither (none had any personals. point blank)
Intro/Outro: Spoke (feelin the intro more)


Vote: Spoke

Although it was rushed, I felt like it was more to read and
see the metaphors used. Ras shit was dummed down
or had lines that were beat as fuck.

Spoke

Your “outlooks” dim, like the colors fading, wit these “Power Points” you’ll get served.
I’m “word-perfect” you can “Excel” and never see a “W” with those “Micro-soft words.”


Creative But tooooo wordy, like most of it was.



Ras

All ya shits basic ,Shit you drop more flat lines than ill patients


Only line i kinda liked

[PunchlinePrince]

Multies: RAS
Wordplay: Spoke
Punches: RAS
Flow: RAS
Personals: None
Intro/Outro: Both Intro's were ehh....but RAS's line hit a lil bit...RAS got him on the Outro...slick...

Vote: RAS

Spoke just didn't put the time and effort he usually does, his verse was ehh..the only line I really like was the Ajar one.....RAS was more consistent, had more hard hitting lines...simple as that...

[Real.]

Your “outlooks” dim, like the colors fading, wit these “Power Points” you’ll get served.
I’m “word-perfect” you can “Excel” and never see a “W” with those “Micro-soft words.”

vs.

I'll rip u too pieces and walk away ass you beg
Spoke pay backs a bitch too bad it cost a arm and a leg

Pretty whack battle. . . Spoke that whole verse was pretty generic, and you FORCED all ya concepts mayne. . . RAS yours wasn't much better, lot of played lines, though some did hit. . . Overall this wasn't very exciting, I expected more from both. But goin with Consistency, my vote goes to. . .

Vote - RAS.

[RAS.]

4-1 TKO close this mods

That the rules right if not sorry for this post