Battle League Week 2: Youngone vs. Kidney Shots (Kidney wins via KO)

[Flawless]

16 bars
3 votes in a row = KO
Otherwise first to 5 votes wins
No Freeposting until match is all voted up
Votes should be explained thoroughly

Example

Multies:
Wordplay:
Punches:
Flow:
Personals:
Intro/Outro:

and a little brief statement of who you chose to vote for

Each battleler has 24-48 hrs to drop after both check in.

[Youngone]

check in...

[ShadowBoxing89]

Youngone what’s wrong son, why even attempt to battle hobo//
The only record you’ll rock in here bro, probably consist of no shows//
I’m not even gone spend time with this, grow some balls and stop grabin mens chest and...
shit,I know your preference;
So don’t say you’ll beat me, cuz I'll quit discouraged by ya homo reference//
If I lose then I’m cursed, he wouldn't bare flames burnt without a fuckin shirt
plus Y.O’ll never be first,
unless I’m warming up before the head of my verse//

I'm The Youngest in Charge
I Let My Game Speak For Itself Nawm...

Jerks, Young bum’ll commit suicide battling a soldier that rips//
dudes only in charge yelling charge…headed….. over a cliff//

http://hiphopgame.com/forums/showthr...light=youngone

what’s with the gun talk and tough act you still the same old fool, you ain't dangerous dude//
Ya face was reconstructed by R Kiteckt, dude didn't even bring no tools//

http://hiphopgame.com/forums/showthr...678#post885678

he dumb as fuck and will never witness cheddar//
Dude Probably thinks buying..
them Creative reaction shoes’ll make his senses better//

Sorry dude, your wrong they want help in this renegade shit//
And I don’t need to hack ya name,kid you gone anyways bitch//

[Youngone]

This guy verses reminds me of "broken processors" hell wheres the comp you lame
whether its audio or text nigga, your weak and im going to leave this new clear (nuclear) like saddam Hussein

blahh
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str8 aim is a bunch of queers especially shadow, so while your on cam having fun with your penis
whether its audio or text? youll rap career is going to "remain win-less" like im running on linux



blah blah alright now
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I noticed you talking about you have your way with women, shit even your personality test states that "they stare at me boring"
So i advise your homo-self to go back and squeeze 7’s dick some more, because your going to "remain headless" like the legendary horsemen
I can even drop four lines while you drop in the rest, shit kid ill rip your bars apart, please
What kind of rapper jerks his penis with a doorknob just go get himself some “hard keys”
You should ask your homeboy frak for emceeing tips, because to be quite honest your flow sucks kid newbie
talking about me being a copy-cat? how creative is that you copy your rap name out of a low budget movie
your just a hopeless guy? that verse is so dull, i think the audience just got a-woke alive
what kind of rapper i know other than yourself, making diss threads about me just to get himself notified
No matter whats categories you try to bring to the table, punch, wordplay, ill even chew your flow man
This dude is only decent at tropicals, I seen you against pen man and you need to give this battle thing ares (a-rest) like that music program
I gotta hand to you though being able to be determined to drop weak verses despite your rep
But sooner or later fam youll be slained with doom – leaving this nigga s-taired like a flight of steps

Closer

I seen this nigga shadow peepin around my battle threads, finding out what this troll is going to use later
Admit it fam? Even with that so called verse you just drop I was never im-pressed like an AOL newspaper

[Youngone]

I haven't rap in about 5-6 months due to b-ball/school so i truthfully dont know how i did but at least i show up lol. eh good luck shadow.

[bigdog]

multies: SB
flow: none
wordplay: young
punches: tie
personal: SB
intro: none
outro: young

vote: SB

verses was weak, but i'll drop constructive criticism. shadow, you was too inconsistent. the verse went from having some personals, to jus generic punches, it didn't have a focus. the flow wasn't consistent, it was choppy, but i gave you the vote because the deciding factor was personals and you kept em coming more than young.

young, some of ya bars were madddd stretched. you had a spot in there were it was actually 4 bars just written as 2. gotta keep it more concise because the punch loses mad power when it jus keeps goin on. you had some alrite ideas in there, you had some wordplay, you just never formed it into a powerful personal. but this your first time back in awhile so you'll get it going, but you gotta try to combine the wordplay wit a personal punch.

[ShadowBoxing89]

yeah, my verse was fugly, I pieced scattered thoughts, it was really a no show verse.

[White Ice]

multies: SB
flow: SB
wordplay: young
punches: tie
personal: SB
intro: SB
outro: young

vote: SB

Kind of weak on both parts like BD said. But Shadow definitely came with some better personals. And Young's flow was just off man. Some of those lines are just mad stretched out. Young did have some nice wordplay though.

[Frak]

Im seein this the same way as others....young had sum nice lines but dam....stretched

Shadow did his thing...personals hit harder...

Vote: SB

[bigdog]

3-0, KO win goes to SB.

[Youngone]

Eh good job sb, i guess i got more training to do lol.

[Flawless]

SB wins via KO..........