Heavily Weeded vs. Edge [Poet Of Poets Tourney Quartal Final] *3-0 W for Edge*

[Jthamind]

WEEDED VS EDGE

Not got long left on so i'll have to make this another


USERS CHOICE BATTLE

Right how it'll work is a little different in this match you will be given total power, i will give each of you 30 lines how you use them is upto yourself.
Will you use the 30 lines n write a diss piece at your opponent or 30 lines to show off your writting skills who knows

It's your job to use your 30 lines in a way you think the judges will whoose you as the winner and here comes the twist


Instead of posting n giving shit away just pm me your 30 line piece
dont tell anyone how you'll approach it give nothing away to your opponent.

When I have both pieces in my inbox i'll post them together

Good Luck
72Hours usual rules apply

[Jthamind]

EDGE 30 LINES

a middleweight against the top man no way should brawl/
but im forced 2 come out swinging wit my back against the wall/
I sense his prescense! stealth status i peep through the cracks/
my tension risen eyes widen consecutive heart attacks!/
I SEE HIM!!!
here he stands a Titan, amongst bacteria/
off 1st impression im enlighten, his Wisdom's inferior/
Heavily odds against me, air is growing slimmer everday/
to the percentage reaches critical, and its no thinner way/
i got goals, im so bold, full of soul, 2 much pride 2 no show/
my point must get cross, facing the big boss, wont have me deprived of the Big Dogs i must go/
i gotta face this guy, deliver a punch and take a try/
as im hugging my fate i began 2 illusionate....seeing Goliath through David's eye/
A Flawless Soilder who takes no prisoners and knows no favor/
i strike the giant, like a pesty tyrant attacking a wall with a dose a paper(s)/
NO EFFECT!!!
Fading away is my Definate Objective....injure 1st than quickly attempt a kill/
his Authenkick armor's so protective....im just hoping 2 dent his Steel/
relizing i cant hit em...i dash off helping my chances of physical refrainment/
Goliath sensing another victim...laughs cuz fear is enhancing his Entertainment/
Save it, little David this battles over by far/
im the "King of Kings", u have yet 2 pierce me with a Scar/
The Pursuit of Happyness grew closer to exposure I felt it/
While running i peeped over my shoulder, the helmet/
i know it's my only chance... his strength is Just-In-Credible/
a opening between his metal! i took a pebble grabbed my slang and let it go/
The giant fell...fare well the dusk cleared/
eyes jumping heart thumping sweat running...now thats weird/
Obviously all this Weed got me living off the Edge/
quick stop the desk stop. thats when i saw it.....Weeded vs. Edge/ damn

[Jthamind]

WEEDED'S 30 LINES

This focus of mine....induces notes one of a kind
Scrap da diss verse, I'm worse when my vocab shines/
Weed broke through the bind, that was open, spoking devine
straight from the grains with remains still croaking my spine/
provoke or decline, either way..I'm earning my stripes
never bitten shit..written shit..spit shit ridiculous/
like syphillus blows, thats quick to sniffle your nose
Who's quick to expose, like movies and action flicks in a show/
I'm sick so you know.. throwed, but don't need medical treatment..
My threads are cohesive, to every head that will read this/
and understand the tribulations I'm facin in time/
replacing the rhyme in the rhythm encased in this shrine/
the face isn't mine, that hand isn't yours
I've been stranded before, won't break out like the clan's at the door/
I demanded a war, and took my trophy home to the shelf
disclosed in it's self, the illness suddenly rose in my health/
I'm opposed by the wealth, and the principles of it
makes me sick to my stomach, these top ten is quickly to plummet/
so take a look in my eyes, and see the crooked & wise
looking back at you, fiction and the facts are actual/
snapping through.. mind and matter the rhyme pattern
see the 'hi hat' jumpin thru speakers and lines gathering/
it's mind shattering, devine gene cells of Gene Hackman
seen between the spleen of my flow with siesmic rapping/
sieze the caption, make it bold which fakes compose...
sis- my known corrosive, dopeness that's learned to focus/
like a Ford does, more than morgue buzz from the dead
since 2003 I've watched ugly rear it's retched head/
in my direction, cut my eyes in sections.. devided my life
so I got my power with me..like Whitney I ain't dying tonight/

[Bushido~Africa]

BASICALLY LOOK AT AS 2 EMCEES ON STAGE GET 2 MINUTES TO IMPRESS YOU WHICH ONE HAS DONE THE BEST JOB

YOU DONT NEED TO KNOW YOU BASICALLY JUST VOTE ON WHO YOU THINK USED THERE 30 LINES BETTER TO CONVINCE YOU THEY SHOULD MOVE TO THE NEXT ROUND!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!

EDGE 30 LINES

a middleweight against the top man no way should brawl/
but im forced 2 come out swinging wit my back against the wall/
I sense his prescense! stealth status i peep through the cracks/
my tension risen eyes widen consecutive heart attacks!/
I SEE HIM!!!
here he stands a Titan, amongst bacteria/
off 1st impression im enlighten, his Wisdom's inferior/
Heavily odds against me, air is growing slimmer everday/
to the percentage reaches critical, and its no thinner way/
i got goals, im so bold, full of soul, 2 much pride 2 no show/
my point must get cross, facing the big boss, wont have me deprived of the Big Dogs i must go/
i gotta face this guy, deliver a punch and take a try/
as im hugging my fate i began 2 illusionate....seeing Goliath through David's eye/
A Flawless Soilder who takes no prisoners and knows no favor/
i strike the giant, like a pesty tyrant attacking a wall with a dose a paper(s)/
NO EFFECT!!!
Fading away is my Definate Objective....injure 1st than quickly attempt a kill/
his Authenkick armor's so protective....im just hoping 2 dent his Steel/
relizing i cant hit em...i dash off helping my chances of physical refrainment/
Goliath sensing another victim...laughs cuz fear is enhancing his Entertainment/
Save it, little David this battles over by far/
im the "King of Kings", u have yet 2 pierce me with a Scar/
The Pursuit of Happyness grew closer to exposure I felt it/
While running i peeped over my shoulder, the helmet/
i know it's my only chance... his strength is Just-In-Credible/
a opening between his metal! i took a pebble grabbed my slang and let it go/
The giant fell...fare well the dusk cleared/
eyes jumping heart thumping sweat running...now thats weird/
Obviously all this Weed got me living off the Edge/
quick stop the desk stop. thats when i saw it.....Weeded vs. Edge/ damn

Overall-WOW, I can't even speak after the shit I just read. I am a fan of the route you took with this. Instead of writting anything you describe your feeling about this match up.I was surprised by this route in away, I because it's more than I expect from you.I like the metaphore in this battle weeded vs Edge as Goliath Vs David (PerfecT).People see this as a mismatch and you used that as an advantage in this written.You were really flexing your Vocabulary muscle in this battle, Shit that I haven’t seen you do in anything on this site. Imagery was good and this shit was mad deep(spastic even).Things you should work on are, Come with a better flow so the reader
want have to take Unnecessary breaths, plus you should guide the reader more add , were you think taking a breath is needed.

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WEEDED'S 30 LINES

This focus of mine....induces notes one of a kind
Scrap da diss verse, I'm worse when my vocab shines/
Weed broke through the bind, that was open, spoking devine
straight from the grains with remains still croaking my spine/
provoke or decline, either way..I'm earning my stripes
never bitten shit..written shit..spit shit ridiculous/
like syphillus blows, thats quick to sniffle your nose
Who's quick to expose, like movies and action flicks in a show/
I'm sick so you know.. throwed, but don't need medical treatment..
My threads are cohesive, to every head that will read this/
and understand the tribulations I'm facin in time/
replacing the rhyme in the rhythm encased in this shrine/
the face isn't mine, that hand isn't yours
I've been stranded before, won't break out like the clan's at the door/
I demanded a war, and took my trophy home to the shelf
disclosed in it's self, the illness suddenly rose in my health/
I'm opposed by the wealth, and the principles of it
makes me sick to my stomach, these top ten is quickly to plummet/
so take a look in my eyes, and see the crooked & wise
looking back at you, fiction and the facts are actual/
snapping through.. mind and matter the rhyme pattern
see the 'hi hat' jumpin thru speakers and lines gathering/
it's mind shattering, devine gene cells of Gene Hackman
seen between the spleen of my flow with siesmic rapping/
sieze the caption, make it bold which fakes compose...
sis- my known corrosive, dopeness that's learned to focus/
like a Ford does, more than morgue buzz from the dead
since 2003 I've watched ugly rear it's retched head/
in my direction, cut my eyes in sections.. devided my life
so I got my power with me..like Whitney I ain't dying tonight/

Overall-Shit was brilliant weeded. The way you manipulated words (Metha4’s similes), your sense of vocabulary Flow was almost perfect (nothing can be perfect). But you didn’t really give me a reason why you should be in a finals position .But it seemed like you were not focused on one thing though (you just rhymed). And I know this ain’t a topical battle so. I’m not even going to go deep in that. overall shit was dope…………..

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Who Impressed-Edge(Felt like he really came prepared for this battle with words).
Flow-Weeded(flow was almost perfect)
Vocabulary-Tie(Weeded had a bigger vocabulary, he always had one. But I don’t graded it on that. I graded it on who used the most vocabulary to the best of there abilities/If it was really need or not and I think it’s a tie. Each used vocabulary in there own unique way)
Metha4’s/Sim’s-Weeded
Imagery-Edge
Creativity-Edge
ENTERTAINMENT VALUE-Tie(both were equally good)
Overall-Edge not cause he had the better etc, Just cause he got more creative with it IMO(he took a different route).


Pm if you need more.............

[`rino]

WHOA!

Edge --- Your verse was remarkable, really was a fantastic piece, I don't think I've ever seen you script a better verse than what you have here today. Shit was original, the story line was brilliant and the way you executed it was pretty fucking decent, man. You managed to grasp it from a underdog point of view and basically walked through the whole thing without a slip up -- The writing skill involved in your piece was really damn amazing. No gettin' up your arse though, you still need to improve on certain aspects, for instance, try and inject multis into your flow -- It'll help improve the following of the lines to lines. But overall this was a fantastic drop!

Weeded --- What can I say? Weeded's dropping fire as usual -- Great drop, but for me, it was too generic, I was expecting a more original piece here, you had a solid flow, multis and a decent write up. But it was jus' too predictable, I was either going for a piece like this or a battle verse from you, and when you delivered what I was expecting it kind of ruined the whole atmosphere of your verse. Overall it was a very solid drop.

Verdict --- I'm going to have to roll with Edge on this one, sorry to say it, but the underdog walked through and claimed the victory here, for the most original written verse, Weeded's shit was predictable, however elevated his piece was it wasn't original and the creativity didn't creep in like it would in his previous verses. Edge kept it original, write a brilliant piece, it flowed well, the way he injected the vocab with corrosponding lines was superb.

Flow : Tie (Both flowed brilliantly!)
Vocabularly : Weeded (Slightly)
Story : Edge
Enjoyment : Edge (Only slightly)
Originality : Edge
Multis : Weeded

Overall : Edge (Damn am I saying this?)

[rocafella07]

Edge- Your verse was soo creative dawg, everywhere from tieing in folks names, to using your underdog charector but turning it around completely on HW. It Couldnt have flowed any better unless you had a few more multi's and words connecting just a little more fluently, Overall it is the best verse you've ever birthed on this site and was used at your biggest time in need against what u called Goliath

On to our heavyweight champ....

Heavily- Very good verse, flow was original, idea was great and you outshined Edge in a FEW spots, there were blemishes in your verse as well, you never seem to let us down around here haha but you didnt come as "New and original" as i thought you would..... underestimation perhaps but it might come back to bite you in tha ass ... no homo


Flow : Ayo This Is EASILY A Tie both of you did ur things.... if Edge had of incorperated a few more multi's he would have took this tho
Multi's: Weeded easily IMO
Creativity- EDGE EASILY.... idea was fuckin brilliant
Story: Edge.... the creativity tied in with the story he was telling and just overall outshined HW as far as story-telling ability went, plus the ending was perfect
Enjoyment: TIE... i enjoyed reading both, Heavily's verses always entertain.... but edge was neck and neck wid him.


Overall: EDGE.... you did your thing homeboy, not going to say HW wouldnt have took u if it was a straight up punches and personals battle but the idea u used here was great and you deserve this vote... keep doing ya thing homeboy