"Deflowered Rose"

[Baron Mynd]

“Deflowered Rose”





Under the guise of darkness, lies a heartless, guy who hides the carcass ..
.. of a seven-year-old school girl back in his high rised apartment.
She’d tried her hardest,
To escape the ropes he’d tied her arms with ..
.. before the tyrant started to divide her garments,
And molest the child regardless.
The violence started, once she’d rejected his evil suggestion ..
.. he beat her ‘til her cries for help, were little more than silent yelps.
The pungent stench of his stale breath, clung to her pale flesh ..
.. and she balled her fists at each sordid kiss,
Placed upon her by his morbid lips.
A single finger prised open the pink insides of this shrinking violet ..
.. and as his assertive hand plundered her cervic glands -
He barely blinked an eyelid.
Rose couldn’t bring herself to meet the glare of this demon,
So, tearfully, she stared at the ceiling - Feeling her innocence tearing and bleeding.
Her tormentor had climbed, the lengths of her thighs and ventured inside ..
.. Clenching the sides of her face -
To reveal the dark intent in his eyes.
Tensions were high, as the monster snarled through pristine dentures of white ..
.. And spat in the young girl’s face,
Where a mass of fear and resentment preside.
The animal lengthens his strides, as beads of sweat secrete from his pores ..
.. The heathen ignores her pleas for remorse -
His sickening lust still eager for more.
With arms that are strong and sculpted, and veins that feed him copious strength ..
.. he gropes for her neck, holds her over the bed, and chokes her to death.
Poor Rose had tried her hardest, to escape this violent hardship ..
.. Now her lifeless carcass, sits on a dirty mattress back in his high rised apartment.
And under the guise of darkness, lies a heartless guy who’s prides departed ..
.. His lone physique roams the streets,
While looking to find his targets…

TOPICS: She sits on the edge of the bed

“As men, we are all equal in the presence of death.”
Publilius Syrus

”Reality is a crutch for people who can't cope with drugs.”
Lily Tomlin

[Youngbattle]

[penrino]

Deep lyrics, man. Rape and paedophilism is a hard subject to overcome, yet you managed to write a short story about it, without lacking on any of the lyrical meaning to it, story, flow, rhymes, imagination. Props, good shit.

[Gotham]

Damn dude this was a fresh verse. The topic was real original, and the imagery was on point. Really nice job, this inspired me haha I'm about to write up a verse

[Octane]

U aint got a deal yet! Everything u drop is hot. Keep droppn Im watching

[Renasanz]

wow/// bugged the fuck out of me man, good word play kept me there every line even though it was pretty fucking disturbing. good post

[scarz]

lyrics and flow was nice, keep doing the thing

[Ethereal]

Dude...that was just a tad too detailed a description for my liking. I dont wanna picture that shit. Yeah it all rhymed and whatnot but you've really given it that much thought and visualisation? All I know is ALL paedophiles should be publicly hanged violently enough to decapitate the sons of bitches like a certain brother of a certain dictator we all know - that's it! I dont wanna know the psychology of their twisted minds. But hey...that's just me.

[Grove~Ryda]

co siggy wit Eth!!! Its too blatant of a description as the imagery wz totally expected, theres no twist to make it sound creative, what we got wz gore gore n mo gore. It came across as a deviant attempt but didnt quite address the issue properly, left us thinkin, "Which Side R U Really On?" N if I shud answer that, it will have to b ur main character, which happens to b the Perv! There shud b a moral when writin such stories so it doesnt in half a sense sound like ur glorifyin the subject. What I wud like to read next, is a sequel, so the piece can have a moral substance. But for now its element is vague and repetitive.

[`rino]

It wouldn't be 'creative writing' if you couldn't picture it....... Quit hatin', Grove and E, nawm. He's doing what he does best and is puts words into pictures.

[Grove~Ryda]

hatin??? lol wat exactly do u mean by hatin??? damn u need to stop houndin around deez boards, i gave a constructive feedback n im sure he'll appreciate it, damn i even asked 4 a sequel smh

[`rino]

A dumbed down sequel... 'cos this one is 'too graphic'...

[Grove~Ryda]

what I wud like to read next, is a sequel, so the piece can have a moral substance. But for now its element is vague and repetitive.

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[Gotham]

haha shit was graphic but i think it added to the overall piece...im wit E on the hangin pedophiles shit tho

[GiRBAUD--JUNKiE]

VERY iNTELLIGENT;; FLOWS REAL WELL AND HAS A EDUCATED SOUND TO iT.

[10 Crack]

wow.. so descriptive that I wouldn't doubt that you are the rapist that you talked about in your rhyme

LMAO

[Baron Mynd]

Rofl, what a reputation I hold at HHG already, a serial rapist. That's gonna be a hard one to top! Haha ..

[G cappo]

NICE LYRICS PLAYBOI. TOUCHY SUBJECT BUT NICE

[IN@_SENSE]

I was feeling this...

... Deep shit.

[MA's Finest]

That was some real shit.Just reading it makes u feel like your watchin it unfold.Scary but some serious shit.Nice Drop man.