After the bombs are dropped - Work in progress so feedback please

[Pharaoh]

2012 the bombs where dropped~a pulse that shocked
Blink of an eye all time was stopped as looters flocked
Sky scrappers rocked as all the goverments fumbled
World leaders stumbled as they where quickly humbled
Sittin back watchin as the global economies crumbled
Now societies lost people no longer have direction
But to say where un-happy would be a mis-perception
You make the best of the situation usin mind elevation
At least now where free from the mis-representation
And Deception of a corrupt money hungry nation
We turned life back into art a fresh start finally usin our heart
Sellin what we can find from a homemade wooden cart
Livin in half torn down buildings like squatters of the past
But I thank the lord that at least now where free at last



I'll either add to this later or find someone to collab with

[penrino]

"Livin in half torn down buildings like squatters of the past
But I thank the lord that at least now where free at last"

I liked that closer. This verse has a depth of truth in it, I like the political and controversal views into which you execute the rhymes. Is this a stand for something? I got the idea that this has suttin' with the London 2012 Olympics and the scams behind it. It's a good political write, the flow and originality is all there. It seems like something that Klashnekoff would spit, if it had the mutli's in it. I like the rhyme scheme, it's all there, multiple rhymes per line in the opening, but it dropped off towards the middle/end. You got the right ideas going there. Keep it up. And do add to it.

When you gonna up some audio, blud?

[Tightest Titan]

Its cool, a little grimey, but I like grimey. The vocab was definitely on point too. I also liked the flow, nice way to choose your words. So far so good. I loved the topic, and you had a way of decribing things but still kept your flow on point. I'm definitely looking to hear more of it, and if you want to collab the rest of it, then I can definitely volunteer. Keep it up, looking foward to you completing it.

[Pharaoh]

Thanks for the feed so far appreciate it

Pen - ive not got a comp at home anymore so cant up my audio for about another 4 weeks and this will prob be the 1st track I put on here once I get round to finishing it off n fine tunin

Uppin

Peace.

[Flawless]

Nice verse.......shit has a lot of truth being involved in it......plus u add some type of weird but kinda grimey emotion to it that makes the audience keep listening...or in this case keep reading...good shit...u should def add to it....

[Gotham]

Yo man I love this shit. Your flow was great, and the rhyme scheme kept it movin. Your theme was good too, kinda emotional. Those last two lines were great, and I think this whole thing was excellent. Definitely add to it

[penrino]

Aight, Pharaoh, blud.

When you takin' a trip to the LDN to do some more shows, blud? Step outta' Merseyside, nawm.

[Pharaoh]

we've done a few in london in the past probably set up a couple of weekends
throughout october november though to finish off the year